Ok in this chapter we've got two stories going on; Lisa gets another patient and we also begin the Sperm Donor story arc. I'm pretty happy with how this chapter turned out. Also I need some feedback about the sex scenes; are they too long? too short? I know that's what you're here to see, so I want to make sure the readers are satisfied. Feel free to leave any comments or suggestion. Download Here:
As always I enjoy getting a chance to read a new chapter.
ReplyDeleteNow some feedback, I like where the story is going and the introduction to another demented patient.
But this was the problem I had, when Cindy taunts Lisa to show her tits, I would have like to have seen her call her bluff as she was instructed, instead of going straight to the main course.
Also a few of the poses were too identical in way of the camera, if you can try and stay away from using the camera in the same position twice.
And it just another small little thing, why was Mrs Fassel's ring on her pointer and not her ring finger?
Sorry if this is sounding like I'm picking on you, despite these little things it's another great issue.
And it's nice that you're coming back to Denise's virginity.
Can't wait to see how Kimberly will assist with the sample.
Yeah, after finishing this chapter I kind of felt like the Lisa/Cindy scene seemed a little bit rushed.
ReplyDeleteAs for the wedding ring X| I was hoping no one would notice, but the ring autofits to the index finger and I have no idea why.
Anyway I appreciate the feedback.
Hi,
ReplyDeletefirst things first: In regards to the previous animation discussion, while i think SISFG as animated comic could be interesting, there is a danger that focusing on animations will impair the comic as whole (the story, the scenes, motivation and general fun of doing it) not to mention rendering times and updates frequency. I'm a bit skeptical about the idea, but at the end of the day its all up to Fas.
As for the scenes, for me the length is good. I don't know about the other readers, but in my opinion long scenes are more satisfying and fun than 1-2 panel ones.
I agree with NightFall that Lisa vs.Cindy action started a bit to fast, but i liked how You paid attention to the face expressions of the girls and the ideas of this chapter.
Take Care :)
Thanks Tom. I probably won't be doing too much animation for the comic. It just wouldn't work. For later projects I may use alot more animation.
DeleteAlso I fixed the image with the wedding so that it's now on the correct finger.
At the pace the comic is going, I'm gonna guess the entire series will last something like 30 chapters. But who knows it could end up getting stretched out longer.
^I meant to say I fixed the wedding RING so it's know on the right finger
DeleteLet me give you the congratulations for 10 amazing chapters \((>_<))/ I just finished read it the last and I remain fascinated.
ReplyDeleteHoo and the sex scenes are ok :) at least for me I like that not everything is sex...10points jeje
I need to know what will happen with Denise!!!! haa n_n
I will not be able to sleep tonight :P
just gotta say, great work, I didn't even know you had this blog until I looked around, great comic cannot wait to see who Kim impregnates first. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks and welcome to the blog. Feel free to comment or make any suggestions if there's anything you'd like to see more of.
ReplyDeletePersonally, I think the sex scenes are perfect. I've become a big fan of the St. Irene story and can't wait until Chapter 13.
ReplyDeleteOh good I'm glad you like the series. Always happy to hear from the readers. :)
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